Is the E in Empire (name of) and the C in carrera marble caps?
The homes open floor plan means that while you are cooking in the expansive kitchen, replete with Empire black granite countertops, Carrera marble backsplash and a commercial styled Wolf gas range, you won't have to miss a minute of the party.
Empire Granite is a company that provides marble and granit countertops, so Empire should be capitalized.
Carrara Marble is a type of white marble imported from a quarry outside Carrara, Italy (been to the quarry). Because it is a style, both words are capitalized.
"commercial styled" should be "commercial-style".
Wolf is a manufacturer of gas ranges, so Wolf should be capitalized.
There should be a comma after backsplash. Although newspapers have dropped this comma, it is still required. The omission of the commas creates uncertainty of meaning. Are there three items in the series or just two with the last being a compound? Is it a series being described, or just one item, further modified by two adjectives?
I also question whether Empire is needed in this description. While Carrera tells us something about the marble (its color and degree of "marbling") and Wolf tells us about the range (its not a Kenmore), Empire does not tell us much about the granite. Empire has no monopoly on any special granite type and, other than being ubiquitous, is not "special". In keeping with mentioning Carrara, I would dig deeper for the granite and name the actual type. For instance, Saint Cloud red granite or Sierra white granite.
|link comment||answered Apr 20 '12 at 14:49 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow|
Proper nouns are always capitalized. A proper noun is a name or title for something unique. This name might have a word in it that is otherwise a noun that is not proper. There are many bridges between the US and Canada. One of them is the Peace Bridge in Buffalo.
If this is a marketing piece for Empire Granite Company, or the reader is expected to have a certain positive association with that company’s name, then by all means use the name. I would use the whole name though. Otherwise, I agree with Jeff. There are any number of companies that sell granite and marble and Empire isn't special.
There are two other edits that you need. Assuming that you are referring to the floor plan of one home (not plural homes), then you need an apostrophe: home’s. If it is multiple homes, then you need to add an apostrophe and make floor plans plural: homes’ open floor plans. There is an article missing before Carrera Marble backsplash.
The punctuation gets a bit messy because you have a list of three items followed by a (correctly placed) comma before the final clause that completes the sentence. Since there are three items in the list, you need a comma between each of those. I don’t know how to clean it up without rearranging the sentence or break it into two. It seems correct with all the commas, but a bit confusing.
You won’t have to miss a minute of the party while cooking for your guests! This home’s open floor plan includes a kitchen replete with amenities including: sleek black granite countertops from Empire Granite Company; a stunning white marble backsplash imported from Carrera, Italy; and a stainless steel commercial-style Wolf gas range.
|link||answered Apr 20 '12 at 21:21 Patty T Grammarly Fellow|
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