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Explain a situation in which you received good advice. Use details to support your answer.

There are a lot of situations were I have  received good advice, but I remember one time when I received advice from my primary doctor. When I was 26 years old, I got pregnant and at that time I was smoking lot cigarettes. When I went to see my doctor, he have told me that I needed to stop smoking or otherwise my baby and I was going to have health problems, so I listened to him. Stop smoking brought me health benefits. As a result, I have more energy, better ability to concentrate, the chance of heart attack has decreases. Like wise, Stop smoking  brought me psychological benefits I am not feeling terrified of the health consequences. No feeling guilty of what I am doing to my body. In conclusion, the doctor advice was very helpful for me.  

asked Nov 10 '12 at 01:16 luz Herrera New member

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Many a time I had sought advice from people/friends under different situations. I remember an instance receiving counseling from my primary doctor. When I was twenty six years old, I got pregnant although I was a chain smoker. When I visited a doctor, he admonished me to give up smoking or else my baby and myself will have severe health hazards. After following his advice, my health and concentration improved remarkably. To conclude, the counsel that I got from my doctor was helpful to me.

link comment answered Nov 12 '12 at 07:11 sanjay Expert
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Many a time I had sought advice from people/friends under different situations. I remember an instance  receiving counseling from my primary doctor. When I was twenty-six-years old, I got conceived and was a chain smoker then. When I visited a doctor,  he admonished me to give up smoking or else my baby and myself will have severe health hazards. After  following his advice,  my  health and concentration improved remarkably. To conclude, the counsel that I got from my doctor was helpful to me.

link edited Nov 10 '12 at 08:59 sanjay Expert

Sanjay, you have a few errors here & I'll address a couple. "I got conceived" is NOT the same as "I got pregnant." The one who was conceived was the baby, not the mother. A chain smoker does indeed smoke a lot, but someone who smokes a lot might not be a chain smoker. "A lot" is a subjective term that can cover a wide range of amounts, depending on the perspective of each individual. A chain smoker is one who constantly smokes.

Patty TNov 11 '12 at 00:39

Thank you for the corrections.

sanjayNov 11 '12 at 03:52

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