Review this sentence for pronoun usage‏

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Hi,

 

I got the message "Review this sentence for pronoun usage" refer to sentence below.

 

One wet a raining winter night just as they were home from a date night together, to celebrate her birthday.

 

How could I fix the issue?

 

Best Regards,

Vicky

asked Oct 05 '12 at 12:43 Vilawan Laksanabencharong New member

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This is either the conclusion or first part of a longer sentence. For example:

 

One wet winter night, just as they got home from a date to celebrate her birthday, the rest of the sentence happpened.

 

You don't need to mention the rain – one wet winter night already says rain. (Excellent use of the W sound, by the way – what about windy?)

link comment answered Oct 05 '12 at 13:35 Peter Guess Expert

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