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The concept of punctuated equilibrium (PE) applied to matters of governance, assumes that governmental policy progresses incrementally (i.e. annual increases in social security contributions as provided for in PL 98-21) or in response to drastic changes (i.e. the voting controversy stemming from the 2000 Bush v Gore presidential election and the subsequent adoption of PL 107-252 (the Help America Vote Act)).

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The concept of punctuated equilibrium (PE) applied to matters of governance, assumes that governmental policy progresses incrementally (i.e. annual increases in social security contributions as provided for in PL 98-21) or in response to drastic changes (i.e. the voting controversy stemming from the 2000 Bush v Gore presidential election and the subsequent adoption of PL 107-252 (the Help America Vote Act)).
asked Sep 03 '12 at 11:19 Charles Sampson New member

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