an add on, please correct. thank you
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when i turned twentione i was kinda of lost my life was based on a one way street on the other hand my father would always be gone and just take care of my little brothers but not me i was always alone he thught that i wouldent care if he was gone i only had one problem he was no able to take any responsibility for me i felt lke i was not his, i couldnt beleve what my life would be wothout him, but he never seem to care.
The ideas are here to turn this run-on sentence into something great, but you've ignored some of the most basic rules of grammar (capitalization, punctuation, spelling). You have several sentences that you've mushed into one. Put a little more effort into correcting the basic mistakes, repost, and perhaps someone will help you fine-tune the rest.
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