How to correct a Incorrect use of prepositions
Like Stephen Colbert question Lynn Westmoreland about the Ten Commandments, it shows he had good intentions but at the same time he did not know the Ten Commandments to be passing a bill he did not know about.
Okay, I'll continue.
What showed that Colbert had good intentions? The fact that he "questioned" Lynn Westmoreland does not show his intentions, good or bad. Why do you say he had good intentions. Your sentence links two disjointed facts but does not make the connection between them clear.
What do you mean by "Ten Commandments to be passing a bill"? This sounds like the Ten Commandments are a rock group and they are passing counterfeit money. First, the Ten Commandments are a concept, an idea, a moral code. As a abstraction, how can it pass a bill? Or, do you mean that Congress (or some other legislature) is considering a bill about the Ten Commandments? If so, you need to arrange and use the words to make this clear. The reader is confused! What are you trying to say?
I am not surprised that Colbert did not know about the bill. I am still trying to wrap my mind around the Ten Commandments taking legislative action. However, my original comment still stands, this is a run-on sentence with two many ideas jumbled together.
I did some research and watched the 2006 episode where Stephen Colbert interviewed Congressman Westmoreland. With that information, I would write:
"Stephen Colbert asked Lynn Westmoreland to name the Ten Commandments. Westmoreland's answer, while it showed he had good intentions, showed that he could only name three of the ten."
That is very different from what Gerri wrote, and no reader could have figured that out solely from what Gerri wrote.
|link||answered May 14 '12 at 09:07 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow|
It is difficult to parse the meaning of your sentence.
First, it is a run-on sentence that contains at least four different thoughts. A sentence, at it heart, should be about one thought. A compound sentence might link two thoughts. But anything more become difficult to understand.
"Like" does not make sense in this context. When? As?
"question" is the plural, present tense. "They question ..." However, you have a singular subject. "He questions ..."
I'm not going to continue to breakdown your sentence. Take another pass at rewriting and submit again.
|link||answered May 14 '12 at 04:32 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow|
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