revising the recommendation letter


please help me to correct my grammatical errors in this recommendation letter and suggest the better expressions with words used more exactly~~'To Whom it may concern:  I have great pleasure in recommending to you, by this letter, for your favorable consideration Ms. Xu Yue who was highly educated and intelligent, and received B.S.c as cumlaude at Yangzhou University. Ms. Xu is one of my students in the university’s department of Horticulture. I first came to know Ms. Xu in 2012 when she took my course on Commercial Science of Horticultural Products. I became acquainted with her when I met her beautiful writing on her assignments of fruit market survey and I remembered her name at once. She listened to my lesson with her thought, and she was the only person who had considered my lectures from a different perspective. When I taught them some emphases and difficulties of the course, she always listened to me earnestly and recorded these difficulties on her note carefully, after class, she came to me and talked about these questions on horticultural business. Her attention on particular circumstances gave her a much broader horizon to develop a creative thought in business, from which I recognized her keen insight into these matters and her sense of logical analysis.  It was worthy to mention her self-taught ability. She was a girl with nimbus and big potential, for example, I did not finish my flower marketing lesson because of limited time and just simply mentioned the concept, but when I checked students’ assignments and found only she gave me a prefect solution to the current marketing problems in flower industry, and she put forward an idea of industrial marketing and has detailed interpretations.  As well as being extremely gifted academically, Ms. Xu demonstrates a high degree of management capacity and organizational skills. As a secretary of the school’s student union, she arranged various school activities. I remembered that she organized the opening ceremony of the school’s Technology&Art; Cultural Festival. She consulted experts, collected information, and helped rehearsing the performance. All these efforts contributed to the great success in this opening session. Ms. Xu is a student who loves business genuinely and was highly motivated and innovative. She talked with me her plan for studying abroad for international business. I am glad to recommend this excellent girl who already possessed good quality and strong ability. Therefore, I lend her my enthusiastic support and would appreciate your favorable consideration of her application.   With best regards'

letters asked Mar 14 '14 at 09:39 Xu Yue New member

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This letter is too long and involved to answer in this type of forum.  You really need someone to sit down with you and go over your letter with you because there are too many changes that need to be made.

link comment answered Mar 18 '14 at 05:47 Dr. G Contributor

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