Passive voice use

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is relected - how would I reword this.

See example:

Since the beginning of the term, his confidence has grown as the lessons have progressed which is reflected in his ability to work more independently.
asked Apr 11 '12 at 06:06 Shelley New member

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The only thing I see is a missing comma after 'progressed'...and I don't think that it is REQUIRED, just a stylistic choice. There are a few words I would remove, but even those are not incorrect, just a difference between your style and mine (I think). I do not see this as passive voice.

 

Since the beginning of the term, his confidence has grown as the lessons progressed, reflected by his ability to work more independently.

link edited Apr 11 '12 at 07:30 Tony Proano Expert

I look forward to seeing the input from those that are smarter than I am.

Tony ProanoApr 11 '12 at 07:16

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What you could do is make the dependent clause the subject of the sentence:

 

"Since the beginning of the term, his ability to work more independently reflects the growth of his confidence during the course of his lessons."

 

However, Grammarly wrongly thinks there is a missing comma and sentence fragments.  You could make "term" possessive - "Since the term's beginning, his..."  Plus maybe we can make this less awkward:

 

"Since the term's beginning, his ability to work more independently reflects how his confidence improved during the course of his lessons."

link comment answered Apr 11 '12 at 18:30 Courtney Contributor

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