two parts of volunteer" and "makes people lively and confident" ,these two phraseses sound strange
What I learned from the two parts of volunteer is that having a goal in life makes people lively and confident.
I agree, those phrases do sound strange.
What I learned from both volunteer experiences is that having goals in life makes people confident and lively.
You could also substitute "gives people confidence and vitality" after eliminating "in life." Like this: "What I learned from both volunteer experiences is that having goals gives people confidence and vitality."
You could also condense the whole thing to make it more personal:
"Both volunteer experiences taught me that having goals gave me confidence and purpose."
"Both volunteer experiences built my confidence and gave me purpose."
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