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Leigh is a mischievous moth that loves fluttering around dangerous thing until she flutters around fire and got burnt.

asked Oct 02 '13 at 14:56 Noel Jones New member

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Actually there's some tense confusion in there as well. It should either be in the present or in the past completely. Also, I am assuming that Leigh is a person, or at least a personified animal (because you can't really ascribe love to animal instinct) so it's better to use "who" than "that"

 

Leigh is a mischevious moth who loves fluttering around dangerous things until she flutters around fire and gets burnt.

 

Leigh was a mischevious moth who loved fluttering around dangerous things until she fluttered around fire and got burnt.

link answered Oct 02 '13 at 18:29 Meredith Avila New member

Good catch on who, Meredith.

Lewis NeidhardtOct 03 '13 at 22:45

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