how can i write this sentence more concise, without loosing meaning?
The level of pasion and honesty that kott exuded as we spoke, is a key reason why UNC is my top choice of schools to attend.
The level of enthusiasm and honesty that Kott exuded as we spoke is a key reason why, UNC is my top choice of schools to attend.
...more concisely, without losing meaning
Kott's passion (or enthusiasm) and honesty is the key reason for my choice of UNC (or the reason why UNC is my top choice).
I presume this is written as part of something bigger, and the context is probably that of seeking a place, so there's no need to say 'of schools to attend'.
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