how can i write this sentence more concise, without loosing meaning?


The level of pasion and honesty that kott exuded as we spoke, is a key reason why UNC is my top choice of schools to attend.

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The level of enthusiasm and honesty that Kott exuded as we spoke is a key reason why, UNC is my top choice of schools to attend.
asked Nov 18 '11 at 23:32 Philip New member

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...more concisely, without losing meaning

Kott's passion (or enthusiasm) and honesty is the key reason for my choice of UNC (or the reason why UNC is my top choice).


I presume this is written as part of something bigger, and the context is probably that of seeking a place, so there's no need to say 'of schools to attend'.


link comment answered Nov 19 '11 at 11:01 A Clil To Climb Contributor

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