How could I be changed? it wouldnt make sense if i put "me" instead of I
My first day it was an okay day, but as time went on I actually made friends who I knew would be my friends forever.
There's nothing wrong with the way you've used 'I' here. The sentence itself is a little wordy, so I would suggest the following:
- Remove 'it' - you've just referred to the day, so you don't need to use 'it' as well
- Insert the word 'just' - to emphasis that the day really was no more than okay.
- Consider removing 'actually' - it makes it sound like you really weren't expecting to make any friends, let alone such good ones. If that's how you felt, keep it in. If it wasn't quite that bad, remove it.
- Remove 'who' and 'my' - again, you've just referred to the friends and that they're yours, you don't need these words.
My first day was just an okay day, but as time went on I actually made friends I knew would be friends forever.
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