Judy: denny had a surgery in Sharp Hospital on Friday, he can't work until Doctor diagnosis you may
this note is write correctly or not. Please correct me
- Capital 'D' for Denny (it's a proper noun).
- Surgery does not take an "a" - a person 'has surgery' or 'has an operation'.
- Change the comma for a full stop.
- "Doctor" either needs the name of the doctor (if you are referring to a specific person) or else needs 'a' (if it can be any doctor) or 'the' (if it is a specific doctor but you do not know the name) or 'his' (meaning the doctor of Danny). Doctor is a common noun so only needs a lower case 'd', unless it is part of a title (eg 'Doctor Smith').
- "Diagnosis" is a noun, and is the identification of the nature of a thing. The word you need is one that indicates the doctor giving permission to the patient, eg 'permit', 'declare', 'say'.
- "You" refers to the person to whom you are speaking, in this case, Judy. To refer to Danny you should use 'he'.
- All sentences should end in a full stop.
So your note now should read:
Judy: Denny had surgery in Sharp Hospital on Friday. He can't work until his doctor declares he may.
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