How would I re word this paragraph?
How would I re word this paragraph? and to start out the sentence?
The reason why this topic is interesting is that I never would think Latino Americans have to deal with diabetes I always think it is more African Americans, but as I researched my information about them, it drew me more to know about why this certain behavior in the Latino American would have such a high rate in diabetes.
The reason this topic is interesting is I never used to think Latino Americans had to deal with diabetes. I always thought it affected African Americans more, but as I researched more, I learned why certain behaviors in the Latino American community led to such a high rate.
Also, unless you're still in high school (or lower), you may want to change the paragraph entirely as it would make an adult sound kind of racist.
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