Verb agreement error
Frankly, I am not going to brag about how school is important to you, as, many teachers have done, but I will say this, every one of you in this classroom, will succeed in here and in life, so rest assured.
This isn’t really a sentence. It is a number of thoughts joined together with too many commas. Since it has so many errors, I suspect that the software is confused and has picked out at least one rule that appears to be broken. The sentence starts with "I am" as the subject and verb. It ends with "rest assured" with “you” as the implied subject. Those two don’t match.
If this were two or more sentences, there would be no commas surrounding as or after classroom. You might pause in some of these places when you speak, but that isn’t how you determine the placement for a comma.
One cannot brag about how school is important to others. To brag means to talk about someone’s accomplishments. Thinking that something is important is not an accomplishment. A teacher might brag about having taught students who, as a result of the teacher’s efforts, went on to great things. A teacher might point out, advise of, note, or emphasize the importance of education to his students. Notice I said education rather than school. A school is a place. It can be important to students for many reasons in addition to the education they receive.
I would not want to sit through a class with a teacher who has proclaimed that every single student in the class will succeed in the class and in life. It just isn’t a statement that is in touch with reality. The word will indicates a certainty. Instead, use a word that suggests the students have the ability to succeed.
When you say, “I will say this,” you need to set off the words you are actually saying with a colon, not a comma.
I will say this: everyone in this class can succeed.
You can avoid the colon by changing the wording a bit.
I will say that everyone in this class can succeed.
I’m not a fan of stating, “I am not going to do something,” and then doing it anyway. It feels a bit passive-aggressive to me. You aren’t going to brag about educating successful students, and then you brag that all of your students will succeed. Think a bit more about what you want to really say. Then just say it.
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