mistakes makde when using different word patterns throughout the sentence, resulting in grammatical imbalance
7. The ODT recommended that attention should be paid to developing a robust strategic planning process that is future oriented and appropriately linked to the resource allocation and performance management process.
I like Lewis's pared-down sentence, which removes the "attention should be paid to developing" phrase.
But in fact a gerund after 'pay attention to' is correct: 'to' is an essential preposition in the expression. Changing it to an infinitive phrase ("attention should be paid to develop...') or deleting the 'to' ("attention should be paid developing") would each be incorrect. The original sentence uses the passive expression 'attention should be paid to...', which is more common in Business English than an active expression ('People should pay attention to...'), but it can be followed by a noun, a pronoun, or a gerund/gerund phrase.
The pared-down sentence removes a lot of wordiness, including that expression so it's a moot point. Just thought I'd mention it.
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The only problem is see is 'to developing'. It is an infinitive phrase, but you put a participle instead. It should read 'to develop' or 'developing' without the 'to' . The other problem is that this sentence is very wordy and contains lots of long buzz phrases. If your audience is familiar with these. there shouldn't be a problem, but I recommend trying to pare it down.
I've done some paring on this, and I don't think it has changed the meaning.
7. The ODT recommended the development of a robust strategic planning process that is future oriented and appropriately linked to resource allocation and performance management process.
|link comment||answered Nov 15 '12 at 23:51 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow|
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