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The most greatest and affected person, who discovered the electricity, is Newton. He, who was an English physicist, mathematician, and alchemist, was born on 4 january 1643. Life without Newton's inventions and discoverys; you would not have anything such as laptop, car, and any electronic machines. How much our life will be harder without all these machines we use it every day.

asked Nov 14 '12 at 18:19 hasan shehab New member

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While no one would deny that Isaac Newton was a giant in the field of science, physics, and astronomy, I don't know of his working with electricity at all. The concept of electricity has been known since ancient times, but it was after Newton when the understanding of what it is started to become known. I would say start over on your essay but would like to point out a few things.

'Most greatest' is never used. 'Greatest' is enough. You don't need 'the' with electricity; it's not a countable noun. I don't know what you mean by 'most affected person'. Affected by what?

Here is a corrected version of your text, but please be aware that it based on a false premis.

 

The greatest and most affected person is Newton, who discovered electricity. He was an English physicist, mathematician, and alchemist and was born on January 4, 1643. Life without Newton's inventions and discoveries would be entirely different.  You would not have anything such as laptop computers, cars, or any electronic machines. Our lives would be harder without all of these machines we use it every day.

link comment answered Nov 14 '12 at 18:38 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow
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I agree with Lewis.  Isaac Newton did not discover electricity, it was discovered at least a couple thousand years earlier.  His work on the laws of motion may have been used by others to develop the knowledge and understanding of electricity, and how to harness or create electricity. 

 

Like many words in the English language, affected can mean different things.  An affected person is generally thought of as someone with a problem, such as mental illness, or at least odd in some way.

 

When writing a paper, make certain that the source of your information is credible.  I recommend you throw away the book or delete the bookmark to the website that led you to believe that Newton discovered electricity.

link comment answered Nov 14 '12 at 19:57 Patty T Grammarly Fellow
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hahahah ;P  okay thank you guys

I thought that Newton descovered electricity hahaha. I changed it to this:

The most greatest and affected person of the Renissance, who developed a system of electricity power, was Thomas Edison. He who was an English physicist, and mathematician t was born on November 11, 1947. Life without Thomas Edison's inventions and discoveries; you would not have anything such as laptop, car, and any electronic machines. Imagine how hard our lives would be without electricity we use every day! If Thomas Edison did not discover the electricity which is the most important power for machines, we would not watch television, travel easily by can, or live comfortably life. Also, he invented many physics rules which helped a lot of scientists. Newton was one of the most successful scientists of Renaissance and his invention and divorces affected on our lives way.

link comment answered Nov 18 '12 at 05:40 hasan shehab New member

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