Confusing modifiers

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How should I rephrase this for the best effect.

See example:

By using this technology, it ensured that the embryos affected with the condition were not used, along with the carriers of the disease.
asked Apr 20 '11 at 15:21 Pamela Singletary New member

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The modifier here -- along with the carriers of the disease -- is unclear.  The positioning of it in the sentence makes it sound as if the embryos were used, but only not in conjunction with the carriers of the disease.  

 

I think you mean to say that the technology ensured that both the embryos and the carriers of the disease were not used, yes?

 

In that case you simply need to move the modifer to a location that makes the intended meaning more clear :

 

By using this technology, it ensured that the embryos affected with the condition and the carriers of the disease were not used.

 

link comment edited Apr 21 '11 at 09:27 Kimberly Expert
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what are confused modifiers?

link comment answered Aug 08 '11 at 11:49 Ahmed New member

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