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Students whose needs that have not been met by mainstream compulsory education should seek alternative education settings that have roots in various philosophies and a sense of community.

 

 

My instructor said this sentence is too vague and I need to be more exact. Can someone help me because I thought it was good. :(  

asked Sep 19 '12 at 21:49 Lauren New member

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I suspect that your instructor is looking for you to elaborate on the alternative settings and various philosophies.  You can't do all of that in one sentence. There should be supporting sentences after this one to explain what you mean.  Without that, you might as well have said they should "do alternate things in various ways" and left the reader to imagine what those things and ways might be.

link comment answered Sep 20 '12 at 01:24 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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