Construcsts based on Indian languages

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Friends, can you help me correct these sentences? Ideally want to identify the pattern or rule that is incorrect ... I am tired of correcting some people in my team at every occurrence of some of these:

  1. Please forward the latest when you are done from your end of updating the missing ones
  2. Please discuss with me before putting these
  3. We will try to beat the last time expectations
  4. We are following up for list of accounts from the stakeholders
  5. We have to be free from the below mentioned action items by this month end
  6. Can we have this below statement included somewhere in the newsletter
  7. We are working towards sharing reports with you whichever available

More later ... :-)

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1) Wordiness, redundancy -- you are done updating.

2) ??? This phrase could actually be correct in the right context -- before putting these on the shelf.

3) Bad vocabulary, inappropriate word choice -- beat the deadline expectation.

4) Missing word or thought -- preparing a list of

5) Wordiness, indirect word choice -- complete the action items

6) Wordiness -- this statement

7) Wordiness, British English spelling of toward -- working to share

7b) Incorrect word choice -- whenever available.

link comment answered Sep 17 '12 at 14:31 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow
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I am not sure if these can be considered "based on Indian languages," because I can't think of see any corresponding constructions in any of the three languages that I know. Anyway, hope this helps:

 

(1) Please forward the latest when you are done updating. ("missing ones" cannot be updated, they can be "included" or "added").


(2) Please discuss with me before putting these (seems fine)


(3) We will try to meet the latest expectations ("last time" expectations is unclear and expectations cannot be "beat"; they are met).


(4) We are following up with the stakeholders for the list of accounts.


(5) We have to complete the below-mentioned action items by this month (In this case, I am not sure how you use the word "items"; the choice of words depends on this. Is "complete" ok?)


(6) Can we have the following statement included somewhere in the newsletter?


(7) We are working towards sharing reports with you whichever available (unclear; what corresponds to "whichever"? Perhaps you mean "We are working towards sharing available reports with you" or "We are working towards sharing reports, whenever they are available, with you.")

link comment answered Sep 11 '13 at 04:45 Joyce F Contributor

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