Wordiness
I have a question regarding this sentence being to wordy. I am describing a person wih OCD, (obsessive compulsive disorder.) A person may check all the doors to be sure they are locked repeatedly--go through out the house to make sure they are turned off they are turned off.
Can I get some help with his please?
Thank you.
Cee
See example:
A person may check all the doors to make sure they are locked repeatedly -- go through this ritual through out the house to make sure that hey are turned off.
asked Sep 12 '12 at 09:00
Carmen Cook
New member
Carmen Cook
New member
1 answer 
Your sentence repeats itself. The second part (after the dash) restates the first, but with errors. Here is a revised sentence:
A person with OCD may ritually check all the doors repeatedly to make sure they are locked.
I hope I haven't missed your meaning.
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answered Sep 12 '12 at 13:45
Jeff Pribyl
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