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I have a question regarding this sentence being to wordy. I am describing a person wih OCD, (obsessive compulsive disorder.) A person may check all the doors to be sure they are locked repeatedly--go through out the house to make sure they are turned off they are turned off.

Can I get some help with his please?

Thank you.

Cee

See example:

A person may check all the doors to make sure they are locked repeatedly -- go through this ritual through out the house to make sure that hey are turned off.
asked Sep 12 '12 at 09:00 Carmen Cook New member

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Your sentence repeats itself. The second part (after the dash) restates the first, but with errors. Here is a revised sentence:

 

A person with OCD may ritually check all the doors repeatedly to make sure they are locked.

 

I hope I haven't missed your meaning.

link comment answered Sep 12 '12 at 13:45 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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