what is the correct wording?

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what is the correct wording?

See example:

I had network failures with MasterCard this morning, the file for today is not in as yet.
asked Sep 11 '12 at 16:40 Judith Anderson New member

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You actually have two sentences (two independent clauses) joined by a comma. This problem is called a comma splice run-on sentence. You can (1) divided them into two separate sentences, (2) join them with a comma + conjunction (and, but, or, yet, for, nor, so), or (3) replace the comma with a semicolon.

 

In terms of the wording, "is not in" is awkward. You might replace it with "has not been sent" or "has not been received" (depending upon your intended meaning).  Your second independent clause is also passive voice. Here is a possible revision:

 

Passive -- I had network failures with MasterCard this morning, so today's file has not been sent as yet. 

 

Active -- I had network failures with MasterCard this morning, so I have not been able to send today's file as yet. 

 

I hope this helps.

link comment answered Sep 11 '12 at 18:08 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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