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How could I clarify this sentence?

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To further these goals, I stay at the forefront of technology-rich curriculum development by continuing education, attending conferences, and collaborating with others to explore emerging Internet trends.
asked Aug 29 '12 at 15:46 Patricia Collins Roller New member

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You are right.  This sentence needs some clarity. 

 

Is your job curriculum development?  Or are you using a technology-rich curriculum to develop yourself?  Continuing education is a phrase that uses the word continuing to describe what sort of education.  It should either be through continuing education or by continuing my education.  Do your goals include staying at the forefront?  Perhaps we can let it be inferred by the reader who will notice the emerging trends part.  You also might consider two separate sentences since the collaboration may be with others you meet through education and conferences, but not actually part of a curriculum.  My example may have changed your meaning, but I hope it helps.

 

To further these goals, I follow a technology-rich curriculum through continuing education and conferences.  Collaboration with others provides opportunities to explore emerging internet trends. 

link comment answered Aug 29 '12 at 16:56 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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