Does this sentence have too many "ands"?
The sentence: "There is a relationship between schizophrenia and knowledge and contact."
What I'm trying to say is that there is a relationship between 2 things: (1) "schizophrenia" and (2) "knowlede and contact" (together). There has to be a way to reduce the ands. It's driving me insane.
Thank you in advance.
This problem does make for an awkward sentence. I’m going to change the example to (1) bread and (2) peanut butter and jelly. Instead of there being the subject, I’d make bread the subject. Bread has a relationship with peanut butter and jelly.
The reason I changed the example is because I don’t think there is a relationship between the disease of schizophrenia and whatever you mean by “knowledge and contact.” That just doesn’t make sense to me. I suspect that you are discussing some sort of statistic on how the disease is diagnosed, but your meaning is very unclear. I'd rework the sentence for clarity.
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