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Dear Rakesh, Thanks a lot for your invitation to attend your birthday party. We were all very keen in participating in the function, but I am going out on the same dates to attend my sister's wedding. My family joins me in wishing you all the best. I sincerely regret the disappointment I am causing to you. Best wishes on this grand event of your life.
sanjay
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Sanjay, your writing continues to improve. There is only one mistake. "Grand event of your life" carries the sense that this is the only grand event in this person's life. If so, that is sad. A better phrase would be "grand event in your life" -- you may have many grand events in your life, but you have only one grand event of your life.
Although correct and clear, you letter could be made more concise. Here is how I would do it:
Many thanks for your birthday party invitation. We were all very keen to attend your function, but I will be attending my sister's wedding on the same dates. My family joins me in wishing you all the best. I sincerely regret any disappointment I may cause you. Best wishes on this grand event in your life.
I changed "thanks a lot" because this phrase has developed an ironic, negative sense in American usage -- the speaker is not really offering thanks, but is complaining.
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edited Aug 11 '12 at 17:23
Jeff Pribyl
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Many thanks for your suggestions and corrections.
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