Is the writing style okay?

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What better way can we write the matter given below? I am ignorant whether I should ask anything other than grammar here. Any help?

See example:

"Building up trust in any relationship begins with self-confidence firstly. Secondly, honesty. Trust your heart and all that you have in it. It's extremely beneficial to know each other's needs and expectations. It helps in understanding each other to a considerable extent.

 

 

Communications must be exceptionally strong to avoid confusions and frustrations.


Responsiveness is a powerful key to strengthen a relationship further."

edited Aug 09 '12 at 15:44 Sush New member

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Adding to Patty's excellent comments:

 

I would say "building" rather than "building up".Prepositions such as up and down are considered redundant when they follow certain other words -- it is not necessary to say climb up, flow down, build up, etc. when the meaning of climb, flow, and build is clear.

 

The prepositional phrase "to a considerable extent" is being used as an adverb modifying the verb "helps", but it is too far removed from the verb for easy reading. Consider rewrite to move the phrase closer to the verb.

link answered Aug 09 '12 at 17:58 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

Thanks a lot for the help.

SushAug 10 '12 at 06:26

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