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i have no idea how to correct this sentence.

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For example, in the United Kingdom alone, there are over 30,000 hectares of line side vegetation along 20,000 miles of the track which must to be managed at all times to keep it safe .
asked Jul 30 '12 at 23:34 mylovi New member

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You question confuses me. You begin your question with the Spanish conjunction (archaic spelling) meaning "and" and then switch to English. But then, even in Spanish, sentences begin with capital letters, and in English, the personal pronoun "I" is always capitalized. Please observe the rules of English in stating your question.

 

The problem with your sentence is the reader does not know what is being kept safe, nor what is being managed. Your sentences end with a relative subordinate clause that begins with "which". The relative pronoun refers back to the noun immediately beforehand -- track. This implies that it is the track which must be managed. But I suspect that you are mean the line-side vegetation (note the hyphen) that must be managed. Near the end of the clause, you use another pronoun "it". The reader, already confused by the misused "which", is left wondering whether it is the vegetation or the track that must be kept safe.

 

For example, in the United Kingdom alone, there are more than 30,000 hectares of line-side vegetation beside 20,000 miles of track. This vegetation must be managed at all times to keep the railway right-of-way safe.

 

"More than" is preferred (rather than "over") when used before numbers.

link comment answered Jul 31 '12 at 00:49 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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