an add on, please correct. thank you
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when i turned twentione i was kinda of lost my life was based on a one way street on the other hand my father would always be gone and just take care of my little brothers but not me i was always alone he thught that i wouldent care if he was gone i only had one problem he was no able to take any responsibility for me i felt lke i was not his, i couldnt beleve what my life would be wothout him, but he never seem to care.
The ideas are here to turn this run-on sentence into something great, but you've ignored some of the most basic rules of grammar (capitalization, punctuation, spelling). You have several sentences that you've mushed into one. Put a little more effort into correcting the basic mistakes, repost, and perhaps someone will help you fine-tune the rest.
|link comment||answered Jul 14 '12 at 03:35 Jody M. Expert|
When I turned tweny one, my life was based on a one way street. My father took care of my younger brothers, leaving me alone. My father thought that I would not care younger brothers if he was gone. I had only one problem. Nobody cared, least of all my father. I felt like that I was not born to him. I could not believe how my life would be without him, but he doesn't seem to care.
I hope this helps.
|link comment||edited Jul 14 '12 at 09:22 sanjay Expert|
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