Problems with conditional sentences
Could someone give me an idea of how I should revise this sentence? Thank you!
See example:
However, if I was to research and be willing to say and prove that Genetically Modified Organisms resulted in, for example, harmful and even deadly consequences, I think that I would be fighting a hard fight with my life at risk for both America and the world.
asked Apr 08 '11 at 15:34
Jessica
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Jessica
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1 answer 
The key here is that you cannot include the 'I think' in the conditional ('If I was. . .I would'). Consider removing it.
Also, 'with my life' sounds funny. Try place in a comma after 'fight' and replace it with 'risking my life for both. . .'
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answered Apr 10 '11 at 10:13
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