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Personality difference between men and woman: in your opinion witch one of these characterizations applies to the woman?
In my opinion women are characterized by these personality with the higher percentage, obviously contrary to these characterization would match the men.
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asked Apr 06 '11 at 18:47 Saeid Hashemi New member

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Here are my suggestions:

 

-- Women are characterized by these personality traits 

 

-- Put a period after 'percentage'

 

-- Instead of 'obviously' you should say something like 'Accordingly, ' (don't forget the comma)

 

-- 'men would align with the opposite of those personality traits.'

link comment answered Apr 08 '11 at 20:32 Kimberly Expert
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Try using non bais words such as female or male.

link comment answered Apr 09 '11 at 22:57 Stella Pitts New member

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