My friend's father quoted some of the examples of the world's greatest women entrepreneurs and wanted her daughter to be like them. They all possessed genuine smile that gave them an incredible success in no time. She was stunned at his words and so was I. when I mulled over her father's words, I wondered how could his final words change her mentality and lead her toward the success? It was a million dollar question to me.
Your first sentence needs some clarity. He quoted examples? I think you mean he gave some examples or he quoted the women. The pronoun her is confusing. Since we know your friend is female, then her must be referring to your friend and her daughter would be his granddaughter. You aren’t talking about a granddaughter though. I think you mean either her or his daughter.
The second sentence needs to add an article on place and delete one another. Can you figure out what I mean?
We are usually stunned by something, not at it. In this sense, by is used on the receiving end of an action, and at is the giving end. She was stunned by his words. He spewed stunning words at the crowd.
The question should be in quotation marks. I wondered, “How could…?” If you don’t want to use quotation marks, then the question should stand as its own sentence. For instance, in my second paragraph above, I asked you a question. It stands alone.
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