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Just a few days ago, I called up my best friend Sandeep. After having a casual conversation for half hour, I asked him out to dinner that night. As usual, he was tied up with his office work . He couldn't put his work off anyway. He cut a sorry figure for denying my invitation. As I could understand his situation; I didn't blame him.
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As your writing improves, it becomes more difficult to just point you toward an issue without also discussing the possible correction.
"called up" is correct and appropriate for a conversational style. However, the "up" is not needed and "called" can be used alone without changing the meaning. You could also say "rang up" or just "rang".
The style manuals and experts disagree on the next item. Some say you should place a comma between "friend" and "Sandeep". Others say if there is no possibility of confusion, then no comma is fine. for your sentence, I would leave the comma out -- unless you want to emphasis a slight pause there.
The opening cluase of the sentence sentence sounds a bit awkward -- "after having" makes me think it can't decide whether it wants to be a prepositional introductory phrase or a gerund phrase. Your sentence would be stronger if it were one or the other.
I'm not sure how to express this next idea. "anyway" is often used as a synonym for "in any case" or "in any event". However, you need a contrasting thought to balance the "anyway". (Sorry, I'm really drawing a blank on how to express the idea. Perhaps I'll come back or somebody else will jump in.)
The last sentence is not a compound so the semi colon is incorrect.
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answered Jun 06 '12 at 22:42
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Thank you very much. I will work on it now.
I called up my best friend Sandeep a few day ago. After having a casual conversation for half hour, I asked him out to dinner that night. He couldn’t put off his work as he was loaded with his office work. He cut a sorry figure for denying my invitation. I didn't blame him because I could understand his situation.
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