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Privacy Policy Protecting your private information is our priority. This Statement of Privacy applies to the www.thedriven.net and The Driven Race and Club Solutions LLC and governs data collection and usage. For the purposes of this Privacy Policy, unless otherwise noted, all references to The Driven Race and Club Solutions LLC include www.thedriven.net and The Driven. The Driven website is a ecommerice site. By using The Driven website, you consent to the data practices described in this statement. Collection of your Personal Information The Driven may collect personally identifiable information, such as your name. If you purchase The Driven's products and services, we collect billing and credit card information. This information is used to complete the purchase transaction. The Driven may also collect anonymous demographic information, which is not unique to you, such as your age and gender. We may gather additional personal or non-personal information in the future. Information about your computer hardware and software may be automatically collected by The Driven. This information can include: your IP address, browser type, domain names, access times and referring website addresses. This information is used for the operation of the service, to maintain quality of the service, and to provide general statistics regarding use of The Driven website. The Driven encourages you to review the privacy statements of websites you choose to link to from The Driven so that you can understand how those websites collect, use and share your information. The Driven is not responsible for the privacy statements or other content on websites outside of The Driven website. Use of your Personal Information The Driven collects and uses your personal information to operate its website(s) and deliver the services you have requested. The Driven may also use your personally identifiable information to inform you of other products or services available from The Driven and its affiliates. The Driven may also contact you via surveys to conduct research about your opinion of current services or of potential new services that may be offered. The Driven does not sell, rent or lease its customer lists to third parties. The Driven may share data with trusted partners to help perform statistical analysis, send you email or postal mail, provide customer support, or arrange for deliveries. All such third parties are prohibited from using your personal information except to provide these services to The Driven, and they are required to maintain the confidentiality of your information. The Driven will disclose your personal information, without notice, only if required to do so by law or in the good faith belief that such action is necessary to: (a) conform to the edicts of the law or comply with legal process served on The Driven or the site; (b) protect and defend the rights or property of The Driven; and, (c) act under exigent circumstances to protect the personal safety of users of The Driven, or the public. Security of your Personal Information To secure your personal information from unauthorized access, use or disclosure, The Driven uses the following: Godaddy.com certified When personal information (such as a credit card number) is transmitted to other websites, it is protected through the use of encryption, such as the Secure Sockets Layer (SSL) protocol. Children Under Thirteen The Driven does not knowingly collect personally identifiable information from children under the age of thirteen. If you are under the age of thirteen, you must ask your parent or guardian for permission to use this website. Opt-Out & Unsubscribe We respect your privacy and give you an opportunity to opt-out of receiving announcements of certain information. Users may opt-out of receiving any or all communications from The Driven by contacting us here: - Web page: _________________ - Email: _________________ - Phone: _________________ Changes to this Statement The Driven will occasionally update this Statement of Privacy to reflect company and customer feedback. The Driven encourages you to periodically review this Statement to be informed of how The Driven is protecting your information. Contact Information The Driven welcomes your questions or comments regarding this Statement of Privacy. If you believe that The Driven has not adhered to this Statement, please contact The Driven at: The Driven Race and Club Solutions LLC 7 Switchbud Place Suite C192-168 The Woodlands, Texas 77380 Email Address: jkeehan@thedriven.net Telephone number: 8324925197 Effective as of June 05, 2012

asked Jun 06 '12 at 11:08 praful kolhe New member

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I think you do not value somebody's time.  Time is precious.  This is a rather lengthy paragraph  to edit. Your lead-in direction is not really a question as much as it seems like a homework assignment.  Please remember that experts who participate on this forum are not employees of Grammarly.  They  show up and respond because  they enjoy discussing grammar.  

link comment edited Jun 06 '12 at 12:40 sanjay Expert

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