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Although I agree with both Sternberg and Runco on their definitions of creativity, one other aspect should be added to it, and that is meaningfulness. Thus, my definition of creativity would be finding problems and communicating solutions to the world by producing ideas or actual products that are novel and useful as well as meaningful to individuals, societies and the world. Creating and proposing a significant meaning is crucial in terms of creativity in 21st century. Novelty and usefulness in creative ideas and products seem no longer sufficient to compete in a society that is rapidly changing and technologically evolving. For example, a company might spend years in researching and developing a brand new product that is aesthetically and mechanically superior. Once it is out in the market, within couple weeks, it is more likely that other companies will come up with better design and quality products. Soon it will lose its market share and disappear. Cell phones or home appliances are good examples reflecting this reality. However, if value is added to creative ideas or products, it can shift the paradigm of the current society, bring positive influence to the world and last longer compare to the creative products that do not communicate any value.  

asked May 23 '12 at 15:59 Nam In Kim New member

I think it is run-on sentence. Two or more ideas in a single sentence. Let us wait for the experts to critique on this.

sanjayMay 23 '12 at 17:09

I think it is run-on sentence. Two or more ideas in a single sentence. Let us wait for the experts to critique on this.

sanjayMay 23 '12 at 17:09

I think it is run-on sentence. Two or more ideas in a single sentence. Let us wait for the experts to critique on this.

sanjayMay 23 '12 at 17:09

I am sorry. It is key-board problem.

sanjayMay 23 '12 at 17:10

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I would leave out the comma after thus.  I see no run-ons, but I did find passive-voice use ("However, if value is added...").  One way out is to use the present participle for the verb and use that entire section as a noun (the act of adding value would be a noun, and that is what shifts the paradigm and so on):

 

However, adding value to creative ideas or products can shift the paradigm of the current society, bring positive influence to the world and last longer compared to the creative products that do not communicate any value.

 

Spotted one more thing.  Compare in the last sentence should be in past tense.

link comment edited May 24 '12 at 06:32 Courtney Contributor

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