How to correct a Incorrect use of prepositions

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Like Stephen Colbert question Lynn Westmoreland about the Ten Commandments, it shows he had good intentions but at the same time he did not know the Ten Commandments to be passing a bill he did not know about.

asked May 14 '12 at 04:19 gerri New member

See my additional comments. From watching the Colbert interview of Congressman Westmoreland, I now understand what you intended. But note, your sentence does not say it and remains garbled and illogical.

Jeff PribylMay 14 '12 at 09:09

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Okay, I'll continue.

 

What showed that Colbert had good intentions?  The fact that he "questioned" Lynn Westmoreland does not show his intentions, good or bad.  Why do you say he had good intentions. Your sentence links two disjointed facts but does not make the connection between them clear.

 

What do you mean by "Ten Commandments to be passing a bill"?   This sounds like the Ten Commandments are a rock group and they are passing counterfeit money. First, the Ten Commandments are a concept, an idea, a moral code. As a abstraction, how can it pass a bill? Or, do you mean that Congress (or some other legislature) is considering a bill about the Ten Commandments?  If so, you need to arrange and use the words to make this clear. The reader is confused! What are you trying to say?

 

I am not surprised that Colbert did not know about the bill. I am still trying to wrap my mind around the Ten Commandments taking legislative action.  However, my original comment still stands, this is a run-on sentence with two many ideas jumbled together.

 

I did some research and watched the 2006 episode where Stephen Colbert interviewed Congressman Westmoreland. With that information, I would write:

 

"Stephen Colbert asked Lynn Westmoreland to name the Ten Commandments. Westmoreland's answer, while it showed he had good intentions, showed that he could only name three of the ten."

 

That is very different from what Gerri wrote, and no reader could have figured that out solely from what Gerri wrote.

link answered May 14 '12 at 09:07 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

And the conversation started when Colbert mentioned something about Westmoreland's co-sponsorship of a bill to require the display of the Ten Commandments in the House and Senate. I don't think all that can be said in one sentence. As an aside, we shouldn't have to research people's questions to make sense of them. In my opinion, you went above and beyond on this question.

Jody M.May 14 '12 at 18:09

On several occasions, I have encountered a run-on sentence so mangled with different thoughts that the writer's meaning cannot be determined. Usually, I offer some general thoughts and ask that they take another pass at writing their sentence. On each occasion, I have received a downvote. I assume either from the writer -- who wants us to do their work -- or from a troll that thinks the same way. We can't help those who won't help themselves. I'm going to ignore this type of question in the future.

Jeff PribylMay 14 '12 at 19:06

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It is difficult to parse the meaning of your sentence.

 

First, it is a run-on sentence that contains at least four different thoughts.  A sentence, at it heart, should be about one thought. A compound sentence might link two thoughts.  But anything more become difficult to understand.

 

"Like" does not make sense in this context. When? As?

 

"question" is the plural, present tense. "They question ..."  However, you have a singular subject. "He questions ..."

 

I'm not going to continue to breakdown your sentence.  Take another pass at rewriting and submit again.

link answered May 14 '12 at 04:32 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

Okay, somebody does not like my answer, but nobody has offered a bettern answer. It is frustrating to try to provide meaningful responses when the reader cannot understand what the writer is trying to say.

Jeff PribylMay 14 '12 at 08:45

It is frustrating to read good answers to good questions and then discover that there is a down vote. I suggest that one may not vote down an answer without posting an answer of his own.

Jack BoatwrightMay 15 '12 at 00:00

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