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these sentences have mistakes and I don't know how I correct they. Also my reference is uncorrect, please anyone can correct it and explain it how to correct it. the Bold words are the mistakes.

 

1)   Also a tool for making cultural integration between different cultures.
       2)  In addition, it is considered as a tool of communication between the peoples of the world.
       3)   Although as Amina’s school arranged for her to join a small and sheltered ‘induction’ class for         some weeks to support her and to help her to understand her new environment” (246).                                             
          In view of the indicators of new economic powers furthermore in view of the strong economic competition.”
        5)  Apart from that such higher strategic benefits with their political and social dimensions.

Reference:
  Mercer, Neil. In addition, Swan, Joan. Learning English development and diversity. The Open University: by Routledge, 1996.

asked May 04 '12 at 10:30 Gina New member

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GinaMay 04 '12 at 11:26

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Incomplete sentence:

 

1)   Also a tool for making cultural integration between different cultures.

 

Either this should be a part of the previous sentence, or it is a dependent clause with most of the sentence missing.  When also is used like that, it signals that what follows is a clause which cannot stand alone.  Clauses can be used as substitutes for parts of speech, like this sentence fragment would make a good predicate.  You could say:

 

It is also a tool for making cultural integration between different cultures.

 

Or:

 

Also, it is a tool for making cultural integration between different cultures.

 

Passive voice:

 2)  In addition, it is considered as a tool of communication between the peoples of the world.

 

You may not need to correct this.  If you know who considers it a tool, you could say that.  You could say:

 

2)  In addition, we consider it as a tool of communication between the peoples of the world.

 

Change "we" above to whoever considers it such a tool.

 

Incomplete sentence:

      3)   Although as Amina’s school arranged for her to join a small and sheltered ‘induction’ class for some weeks to support her and to help her to understand her new environment” (246).                                            

 

Although is usually used as part of a dependent clause, which means a part of the sentence which cannot be used alone.

 

Incomplete sentence:

4)  In view of the indicators of new economic powers furthermore in view of the strong economic competition.”

 

In view of all this, so what?  What is the point of the sentence?  It sounds like the rest is missing and that this is just the starting part of a sentence.

 

Incomplete sentence:

5)  Apart from that such higher strategic benefits with their political and social dimensions.
 

Where is the rest of it? You keep using clauses in place of sentences.  Sentences must have a noun and a verb.  However, you cannot have your main part of the sentences inside clauses.  They only add to the sentence, but do not make a sentence.   Dependent clauses often replace a single part of speech, but they cannot stand alone.

 

 

Bibliography, not a sentence.

  Mercer, Neil. In addition, Swan, Joan. Learning English development and diversity. The Open University: by Routledge, 1996.

 

There is no need to check this with Grammarly, and I don't think Grammarly can successfully test a bibilography.

link comment answered May 04 '12 at 12:14 Courtney Contributor
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Rather than repeat Courtney's critique, I'll focus on the Bibliography format. Your format does not match any of the major style guides. I'll use the Chicago Manual of Style (16th edition, University of Chicago Press, 2010). Note the locations of commas, periods and colons.

 

Author's Last Name, Author's First Name. Book Title in Italics: Book Subtitle in Italics. Location where published: Publishers, Date of Publication.

 

When there are multiple authors, the second, third, etc. names appear First Name Last Name.

 

Mercer, Neil and Joan Swann. Learning English: Development and Diversity. New York: Routledge, 1996

 

The MLA (Modern Language Association) style is the same, except it adds at end the medium of the material consulted -- Print, Manuscript, Electronic Resource, Microfilm ...

 

Mercer, Neil and Joan Swann. Learning English: Development and Diversity. New York: Routledge, 1996. Print.

 

If you are in the UK, the location of publication is London.

link answered May 04 '12 at 20:31 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

when I wrote the bibliography in my essay it is still wrong at the two authors's name despite ofI wrote the second name and the fist name for the first author then I put conjunctin and I wrote the second name then the first name of the second author:the book titlle is: learning english: development and diversity.authors's book are: Neil Mercer and Joan Swann.the location of publish is: the open university.published by: Routledge.the year of publish: 1996. Mercer, Neil and Swan, Joan. Learning English: development and diversity. The Open University: by Routledge, 1996.

GinaMay 05 '12 at 10:05

Like I said, don't run that part through Grammarly. If you know something is right, you don't need to run it. Grammarly gives some false positives and you have to ignore them.

CourtneyMay 05 '12 at 12:55

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