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It was college day at Delta State University, all the seniors in my class had brought their signed consent forms back to go on the trip, except for a few of us in the class

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It was college day at Delta State University, all the seniors in my class had brought their signed consent forms back to go on the trip, except for a few of us in the class.
asked May 02 '12 at 03:00 jerry edwards New member

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It is a run-on sentence of the comma splice variety. You have joined two independent clauses (complete sentences) with a comma.  You have three choices to correct the problem.

 

1) Replace the comma following "University" with a period. Now you have two complete sentences.

2) Add a coordinating conjunction -- for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so -- after the comma and before "all" --> "... Delta State University, and all the seniors ..."
3) Replace the comma following "University" with a semi colon. Semi colons are used to separate two tightly related independent clauses.

 

Hope this helps.

link comment edited May 02 '12 at 04:09 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow
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This is a run-on sentence. It has two main clauses separated by only a comma. Change the comma to a semicolon. It also needs a period at the end.

 

It was college day at Delta State University; all the seniors in my class had brought their signed consent forms back to go on the trip, except for a few of us in the class.

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