How can i fix a sentence that is wordiness and has a Confusing modifiers

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Using their knowledge with accounting procedures and changes to the laws, field audits are done to review income tax returns and to verify information or to update tax liabilities.

asked May 01 '12 at 03:46 gerri New member

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You have a dangling modifier.  The worst part is that the clause at the beginning does not seem to relate to the rest.  I mean, how do "they" (as in your use of "their") relate to the rest of the sentence?  Some group is using their knowledge, and then field audits are done, but how do they relate?  Getting rid of the passive wording may help.

 

I don't know how to decrease the wordiness right off.  I can make it clearer:

 

Because tax examiners are familiar with accounting procedures and changes to the laws, they can do field audits to review income tax returns and to verify information or to update tax liabilities.

 

You may have to adjust the wording and terms, since I don't know who "they" is, but at least it is clearer.  You might be talking about CPAs, tax preparers, tax lawyers, or IRS agents.

 

Here is a little less wordy:

 

Since tax examiners know accounting procedures and tax law changes, they can do field audits to review income tax returns, verify information, or update tax liabilities.

 

My advice is to keep playing around with it.

link comment edited May 01 '12 at 14:37 Courtney Contributor
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First, for the sentence to make sense, you need to clearly state the subject. Who is conducting the field audit? Accountants? Real Estate Agents? Insurance Agents? Business Lawyers? Tax Attorneys?

Using their knowledge of accounting procedures and changes in the law, specialists conduct field audits to review income tax returns, etc.

 

Specialists with knowledge of accounting procedures and changes in the law can do field audits to review income tax returns, verify information, or update tax liabilities.  

link comment answered May 03 '12 at 07:17 Kevin Knott New member

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