The one fatal flaw is though if a person does something he deemed right, effected anthother person

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The one fatal flaw is though if a person does something he deemed right, effected anthother person who deemed it wrong it createds a paradox that cannot be solved my mere logic.
asked Apr 30 '12 at 17:03 Darren LaBrecque New member

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It is hard to provide suggestions here as your meaning isn't clear. You seem to have two, possibly three, ideas here and none of them are truly complete.  Perhaps you should try breaking it up into two sentences.  While I can't offer how you might do that without a better understanding of your intent, I will suggest:

 

"one fatal flaw" --> delete "one" as it is redundant.  There can only be one "fatal flaw".

"is though if" is awkward.

"deemed" (both istances) needs to agree in tense with "does". Perhaps "does" and "deems".

"effected" is not a word. The "effect" is the result, "affect" is the cause --> "affected"

"anthother" --> "another"

"createds" is not a word. Either "creates" or "created". The choice has to agree in tense with "does" and "deems"

"by my mere logic" --> logic is universal. You logic and my logic should be the same. Perhaps you mean either "by logic" or "by my mere thoughts".

link comment answered Apr 30 '12 at 20:25 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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