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After Hayden had left, Peter spent the rest of the afternoon swimming and phoning Arianna. Lazing around the pool, he chatted to his mother, whom he found had lost some of her sparkle.

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After Hayden left, Peter spent the rest of the afternoon swimming and phoning Arianna. Lazing around the pool, he chatted with his mother who had lost some of her sparkle in her eyes.

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