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how should I reword this?

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Beauty pageants want girls who are "a man's image" meaning thin and beautiful.
asked Apr 23 '12 at 20:31 Laura King New member

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I know what you are trying to say, Laura, but I'm not coming up with a good way to rearrange your words.  (First, I'll argue that it isn't just men view beauty queens this way, but society in general.)  The phrase "a man's image" doesn't fit well here.  It's a bit muddy because a man's image is an image of a man.  It should really be "a man's image of beauty," but then it gets wordy because you already used the word beauty.  I would also come up with a descriptive word other than beautiful.  Since it is a beauty pageant, being beautiful should be a given.  What beautiful looks like (I think), is the point of the sentence. 

 

Beauty pageants want girls who fit the mold that men stereotypically like: those that are thin, leggy, and with ample cleavage. 

link answered Apr 23 '12 at 22:13 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

How about "a man's ideal of feminine beauty". Avoiding the duplicating of "beauty" may not be possible as no synonym for beauty really fits either use.

Jeff PribylApr 23 '12 at 22:22

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