Delete the word "under" in place of "by"?

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Also, there were some factors related to employers not being required by the Fair Labor Standards Act to pay nursing mothers when they took breaks at the company to express milk (Holland, 2006).

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Also, there were some factors related to employers not being required under the Fair Labor Standards Act to pay nursing mothers when they took breaks at the company to express milk .
asked Apr 21 '12 at 05:18 Cathy Parks New member

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I think "under" sounds better there.  However, your biggest problem here is squinting modifiers.  That clause can modify either part of the sentence.  You probably should simplify your sentence or at least reorder it.

 

"Also, there were some factors related to employers not being required to pay nursing mothers when they took breaks at the company to express milk under the Fair Labor Standards Act (Holland, 2006)."

link answered Apr 21 '12 at 06:20 Courtney Contributor

I agree with your assessment. However, your revision makes it seem as if expressing milk is regulated by the FLSA. Other, possibly more massive, reordering is required.

Jeff PribylApr 21 '12 at 14:41

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I can quite bring myself to agree with Courtney's revision.  Yes, there is a squinting modifier, but "under the Fair Labor ..." logically is closely attached to "required to pay".  Moving it to the end makes it seem that mother are required by law to express milk.

 

Perhaps if we clean up (or delete) some of the prepositional phrases (and reorder others) we can find some clarity.

 

"Also, there were factors related to the Fair Labor Standards Act's failure to require pay for nursing mothers when they took breaks to express milk ."

 

Even so, the sentence is still a bit awkward.  The answer may be to break into two and merge one with what comes before or after.

link comment edited Apr 21 '12 at 14:39 Jeff Pribyl Grammarly Fellow

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