Please check 2nd sentence. Is it correct?
They took their eyes off of God and began focusing on what they didn’t have. I’m reminded that I too tend to focus on what I don’t have, or focus on the problem at hand.
No, it needs some work. You don't need the comma because you don't have a second independent clause. But you are using the same verb, and that is a bit awkward. You seem to be saying: The do this. I do that too! Or I do something entirely different.
I think you are trying to say that focusing on the problem at hand also takes your eyes off God. But one might argue that focusing on the problem at hand might include keeping your eyes on God. Adding this is really unclear. I'm not sure how to reword it, but hopefully my feedback will help.
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