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His bad face comes at the beginning of the semester when he is trying to scare out students who are gabbling around the college to look for easy "A. In the short run, he will make you understand that you cannot be a college student and be thinking that success comes without working for it.
Generally, your problem is odd word choices.
There is a common expression "to put on a good face" - meaning pretending everything is better than it is, you look happier than you feel. It is quite uncommon to say someone has a "bad face." Unless this teacher is known as the man with the bad face, I would find another way to describe whatever you mean.
Scare idioms - You can scare up enough resources, scare off an intruder, or scare off crows in your field. You might get scared out of your pants when surprised, but I have never heard anyone scare out someone.
I was going to say that gabbling is not a word, as I have never seen this word used. I learn something new every day. It is a word. It means speaking rapidly or unintelligibly, jabbering or cackling. Though it is indeed a word, it doesn't seem to fit your context. You don't talk rapidly around the college.
I don't think that you need to put the grade (A) in quotes. If you do, though, make sure there is a pair of quotation marks.
When you use the phrase "in the short run" you are taking about something that will happen only part of the time - the now part - that is usually contrary to something that will happen in the long run. In the short run, the restaurant will be short on staff while some people are trained. But in the long run, the restaurant will have better food and better customer service. I think you might mean he will quickly make them understand.
Faulty parallelism - He will make you understand A and B. In this construction, A and B need to be worded in a similar way. Your A is "that you cannot be a college student" and your B is "be thinking hat success comes without working for it." It doesn't work. Here's a parallel sentence with that structure: He will teach you to write and to sing. I don't think this is actually the construction you need for this part. Try being a bit more concise. He quickly shows students that it takes hard work to be successful.
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