adverb/adjective before a noun?

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Gauchely gait. I write this term attempting to use an alliteration for a loud/ungraceful/obnoxious walk/pace/creep etc... Its use makes sense to me, but I am confused about the details.

See example:

We went through some ideas and planned queues for me to either make a scornful scream, a mourning moan, or even, perhaps, a gauchely gait.
asked Apr 24 at 04:38 Jake Allison New member

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The term "gauchely gait" works seeing that it is a adverb complimenting a noun, but the comma (,) is not used right unless it is someone talking and then your trying for a sort of stutter step to the speech in which case it should be in quotation marks ( " ).  The problem I see is the "mourning moan" it should be (a moan of mourning) or (a mournful moan).

Example 1: We went through some ideas and planned queues for me to either make a scornful scream, a mournful moan, or even perhaps a gauchely gait.

Example 2: The man said, "We went through some ideas and planned queues for me to either make a scornful scream, a mournful moan, or even, perhaps, a gauchely gait?"   This would also make it a form of question or a Rhetorical question at the end.

Hope this helps.

link answered Apr 24 at 06:48 allen New member

I would agree with you strongly on the "mournful" part. It really wanted me to change it though. I later figured out how to override the suggestion. But I think the comma placement you suggested is very helpful. I'm glad gauchely gait works. It seemed ok to me but grammarly was having a shit fit over it. Thanks for the help!

Jake AllisonJun 04 at 04:03

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I think you have misused the word 'queue'.  A queue is a line (not a line of dialog).  A prompt used in theater is a 'cue', which is what this seems like to me.  I like Allen's suggestion of 'mournful' over 'mourning'.  'Perhaps' is a parenthetical in the sentence and should have commas around it, but it can be removed without changing the meaning.

 

We went through some ideas and planned cues for me to either make a scornful scream, a mournful moan, or even a gauchely gait.

link answered Apr 24 at 12:50 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

Ya my bad on the queue/cue issue. Mournful is something I wanted in the beginning, yet grammarly had other plans :I Thanks for the suggestion to remove "Perhaps". I shall follow your advice.

Jake AllisonJun 04 at 04:05

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