need grammer help for "has brought" or Alternative

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My question is a about a sentence I formed with in my book.  no matter how I seem to word it, it just never comes out sounding right unless I use " has brought"  but I know that it is not the correct tense for the sentence. Here is the sentence: The true queen said “for you to offer up your life in order to help me has brought much joy to my heart, but it would never work, for it will destroy you. I have tried to reweight this many times with no luck.  Word and spell check will not take this a proper.  

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The sentence is wordy and a bit convoluted, but it is dialogue.  'Has brought' is fine here.

'For' needs to be capitalized, and you need a comma after 'said'.

 The true queen said, "For you to offer up your life in order to help me has brought much joy to my heart, but it would never work, for it will destroy you."

link answered Apr 23 at 14:20 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

lol yeah I was trying for convoluted in a way. It’s hard to read it out of context but I wanted it to have a feel of vagueness and leave room for miss interpretation of the words. The characters the queen is speaking to need to miss understand her meaning, and later on in the book the words become clear and the reader can see how the characters mistook the words.Thanks for the help. If you can think of a better way of writing this let me know it would help a lot. This sentence was like a bolder in my path for some time now.

allenApr 24 at 07:07

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This sentence was like a *boulder* blocking my way for some time now.

link comment answered Sep 14 at 10:52 Jad Maestro New member

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