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I give some watermelons for the lion to eat because it can make him feel cooler. Then, the lion feels good to go out with me to hunt for more food. Finally, we will have a delicious meal.
Sanjay has a good point. Lions don't eat fruit. The context of your sentences is throwing me off a bit here, so no matter how I try to rewrite it for you, it sounds awkward. Do you actually hunt and have a meal with the lion? Is is a pet lion?
"I give some watermelons for the lion to eat because it can make him feel cooler."
You give something to someone, not for someone. You have made the object of the sentence "some watermelons." Since the topic is more about the lion, you can make the lion the object: I gave the lion some watermelons. You can delete "to eat" because the reader can guess that purpose. Though a lion might prefer to play with a watermelon than eat it, the point is that it will cool him. I gave the lions some watermelons to cool him off.
"Then, the lion feels good to go out with me to hunt for more food."
An introductory phrase usually needs a comma after it, but not in this case. You can delete "to go out" here for much the same reason I gave about deleting "to eat." The reader can understand that the lion would go out to hunt. Then the lion feels good enough to hunt for more food with me.
"Finally, we will have a delicious meal."
There is nothing wrong with this sentence. I would probably use "afterwards" instead of "finally." Afterwards, we will have a delicious meal.
|link comment||answered Apr 15 '14 at 14:05 Patty T Grammarly Fellow|
The lion is a non-veg. It does not eat watermelons.
To quench the thirst of the lion, I offer it some watermelons to keep its body cool. Then, the lion feels good and comes out with me to hunt for more food. Finally, we will have a delicious meal.
|link comment||answered Apr 16 '14 at 17:29 Sanjay Expert|
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