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The observation data was discussed during the post-observation conference and included a discussion of my collection on the data discussed in the pre-observation conference.

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The observation data was discussed during the post-observation conference and included a discussion of my collection on the data discussed in the pre-observation conference.
asked Apr 16 '12 at 06:13 Consuella Johnson-Caldwell New member

Too many 'observations' and 'discussions'. Maybe: My collection of the data from the pre-observation conference was included in the discussion that took place during the post-observation one.Hope this helps

Angela RigleyApr 21 '12 at 13:45

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Too many 'observations' and 'discussions'. Maybe: My collection of the data from the pre-observation conference was included in the discussion that took place during the post-observation one.Hope this helps – Angela Rigley

link comment answered Apr 21 '12 at 13:49 Angela Rigley New member

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