Is the word ultimate used properly?
Grammarly is wanting me to substitute ultimate for final.
It just doesn't seem right.
Consequently, the focus of this paper is dedicated to developing a plan that will get us to obtain our ultimate goal for CO. The controlling or limiting predisposing factors through behavior modification and/or increased awareness must be considered in a prevention plan.
There are several word changes that I would make in these two sentence, but I don't know that ultimate would be one of them.
There is a difference between ultimate goal and final goal. To me, ultimate goal carries a feeling that there will never be a better goal or higher purpose than this one. Since you are talking about a plan, then there are steps that will be taken. Each part of the plan can be a goal. The plan is completed when the final goal is reached. I suspect that the software noticed the word plan and decided that you want to talk about the last goal, not the best goal.
Make sure that consequently is the word you want to start this sentence with. Do the previous sentences outline some actions or situations that have consequences? Right before this sentence did you discuss something that directly resulted in the focus of the paper? I point this out because it is a word that is often misused.
The focus of this paper and this paper is dedicated is somewhat redundant. How about: The focus (purpose?) of this paper is to develop a plan.
I'm not sure how to explain why I would not use "get us" in this sentence. I think it is more of a fifth grade level of writing. Allow us, enable us, grant us, lead to...
Depending on the purpose, watch out for informal words and phrases. If this is formal writing, as most papers are, avoid the use of first or second person narrative (us, our) and constructions such as and/or. Pick either and or or. If it must be both, use and. If it might be both, but only has to be one or the other, use or.
I think you are missing the word "of" before predisposing. Without it, the sentence is too confusing for me to follow.
I hope that helps.
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