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I am trying to figure out why I keep receiving a squinting modifier for this sentence. Please assist. Thanks
The foods and beverages initially were high in fats and calories, so PepsiCo’s leaders formed a team that focuses on healthier measures to generate products for consumers who desire to live a healthier lifestyle.
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The foods and beverages initially were high in fats and calories, so PepsiCo's leaders formed a team that focuses on healthier measures to generate products for consumers who desire to live a healthier lifestyle.
Brenda Washington
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Like Lewis, I'm not seeing the squinting modifier. But I do see a sentence that is unnecessarily long. The ending also feels strung together with a rhythym that is disconcerting. Although my concern has its roots in grammar, my objection is really more "poetic." In the sample below, I've added <> to emphasis the "beats" of the sentence.
" ... <on healthier measures> <to generate products> <for consumers who desire> <to live a healthier lifestyle>"
Next, preparing products in a healthier fashion does not necessarily make the product itself healthier. And last, "live a healthier lifestyle" is redundant.
Taking all together, I suggest changing the ending to:
" ... on healthier prodeucts for consumers who desire a healthy lifestyle."
Hope this helps.
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answered Apr 06 '12 at 16:26
Jeff Pribyl
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